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In his article "Print Thyself," Jerome Groopman uses personal stories and references to credible sources to appeal to his audience's beliefs about the value of progress and scientific innovation. By relying heavily on such ethical appeals, Groopman effectively persuades his audience of the value of 3-D printing in the medical field.
Thoughts: I think this thesis statement effectively lays out what the rest of my essay will be about in the first sentence. The second sentence is meant to voice my argument/claim for the rest of this essay regarding the author's rhetorical strategies. I like this statement because it is relatively short, but I am a little worried that it is not specific enough.
Thesis Statement #2
In Jerome Groopman's article "Print Thyself," the author persuades his audience of the benefits of 3-D printing in medicine by using a series of personal narratives, referencing credible sources, and appealing to the audience's beliefs about the importance of scientific innovation. By predominantly using these ethical and logical appeals, Groopman effectively communicates his opinions regarding the subject, and persuades the audience of the legitimacy of this viewpoint.
Thoughts: This statement uses a similar layout as my first thesis statement, but it uses different wording and adds some specificity. While it is more detailed than the first statement, this statement could potentially be too wordy and confusing.
Overall Thoughts
These thesis statements helped me narrow my focus to about three main strategies that I want to focus on in this essay. This will prove to help me as I set out to write my essay, since I now have a basic layout and argument in mind. However, it will still be a little difficult to find appropriate examples that support my claim, so I will have to pay special attention to this as I continue working on Project 2.
Reflection
For this reflection, I read Chloe's and Andrea's drafts of thesis statements. I thought both of their thesis statements were off to a good start, and each of them had different strengths and weaknesses.
I really like how Chloe wrote two for each opposing side of her debate. I think this is really effective in deciding which side she might want to argue for in terms of the rhetorical arguments. While she didn't give many specific details on how the rest of her paper might look, I definitely think she's off to a good start.
Andrea's thesis statements were well-developed and very specific, which I think is really important for this project. I do think she could add some information about how effective the rhetorical strategies are in her text, but overall it looks like she's off to a good start as well.
These posts helped me realize that it's important to both specify which rhetorical strategies you're going to use in your essay and also make some type of claim regarding these strategies. After reading some of these thesis statements, I feel like I am on the right track with my own thesis statements, even though they could definitely use some editing as well.
I find the way you wrote your these very interesting. I tend to do it very differently as I feel like I want to give the reader a "taste" of what I intend to write however I am averse to giving away too much. I think this stems a lot from the way I write because I feel like if I let myself write too much in the thesis statement, I'll simply write one short paragraph and be done because I will have said what I need to say. But it seems like your theses work great for you! So that's awesome! Good luck on this project.
ReplyDeleteYour post was very comprehensive and I think that the thesis statements you came up with were well thought-out. They seem to be written with the advice in the Craft Box in mind. The statements are a good fit for the project because they present an argument regarding the success of the text's rhetorical strategies effectively and concisely.
ReplyDeleteYou and I wrote in a similar fashion. While many posts I saw had a single-sentence, yours was two-three like the theses we looked at in class. I'm not saying one sentence theses are wrong, these just seem to fit the project a little better. Your ideas are well thought out and present your argument well. Looking at yours, I will likely go back and tweak my own thesis statements.
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